Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people whom they serve.
Government officials are doing their part for a cause. There are appointed by the leaders of the government to serve the public community. These officials range from police who protect our community, Post-Office who take care of our letters from our associates to garbage and road cleaner, who takes care of our sanitization. Many of the public problems are already brainstormed by them, therefore, they set a specific pathway to handle them. Field officials are the one who executes them to serve the community, However, sometimes a new problem arises which was not considerably discussed before hence, it relies on the judgment of these officials that are appointed to solve them.
For instance, last year Delhi received 10 meters more rainfall than the average due to which there were the water lodging problems in some specific parts of the city. As Yamuna river flow amidst the city, there was the danger of a rise in the level above the danger mark, which subsequently would flood the small village settlements near the river. This type of situation has not been seen by the government before as it is unlikely for the city to receive a high amount of precipitation. However, New Delhi Municipality Corporation came out with a strong plan to make sure the river does not overflow. They asked the government of neighboring cities to refrain the gate of the dam so that there will not be the overflow of the reservoir. Also, they build the emergency flood route and hydraulic pumps around the river to remove the access water to some length. Hence sometimes wher the situation get worse then it seems right for the official to brainstorm about the solution and use their own judgment.
Another illustration for my view is the bold step taken by the government, Demonetization. It is the process of demonetizing the old bills and change it with the new one. In November 2017, the existing government took steps to handle counterfeit of of indian currency. At 8 in the evening, the prime minister announced the discontinuation of current 500 and 1000 bills in exchange of new 2000 and 500 bills. To implement this, the organisation of new currency was already deposited a night before to most of the banks so that in the morning people can visit and exchange their old bill with new one accordingly. Also, they provided certain exemption like most petrol pumps and supermarkets can accept the old bills for 1 month so that people can buytheir basic needs and ration. This step had a great impact on the economy that raise significantly witin six months decreasing the counterfeit of to almost nil.
In sum, I believe in some circumstances that it is better for the government to rely on their own judgment rather than carrying out the will of the public they serve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89247311828 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72532264375 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544086021505 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1423832614 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.75 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217702135024 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609993608127 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096071832772 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174252719925 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157358987162 0.0667264976115 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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