Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position
Art sector and military sector both of them are important for a country. If we investigate among the countries the truth can be seen. Military is important to save and protect the country from invaders and art is essential part for the people to remind them who they actually are. Though in the passage author did give his opinion that government should invest equal amount in arts and military, i can not agree with him completely. Suppose, a country is at war and people are enduring endless oppression and suffering from invaders then what will that country do? invest in arts rather then military will be a tragic option to chose.
First of all, a country with lots of arts and cultures but have no or little military support is in dangerous situation. If we look back in history a lots of evidence of extinction of many nation with lots of arts but no military power. Many nomadic or semi nomadic people who lives simple and happy life with their culture were completely eradicated by other strong nations. So, though culture is important but establishing a powerful military is more important to save the nation and save the culture.
Secondly, a clever look at our current nations is a day light prove of the fact. Every nation filled with cultures,arts and traditional activities nowadays have a strong military. Suppose, a country is indirectly ruled by other countries then the cultures of the invaders will intrude in to the affected country.
In sum, a country should invest equal amount for both culture and military if only it has established military force. When a country reaches at a level in defense from where is hard for other countries to invade her, only then that can ornate their arts and invest more and more to save them from extinction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82026143791 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5364130191 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490196078431 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2574566092 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107442184349 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430479577485 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396959280671 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0693321573365 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330300317874 0.0667264976115 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 100.480337079 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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