Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Many people are involved in the dispute of this hot topic, either supporting or opposing government’s decision to give an equal financial support to arts and military. Although, it seems to be a fair statement at first, I am prone to disagree with it. Form this statement one could conclude that both arts and military are equally important, which is arguable from my point of view.
First of all, it is a known fact that on an average more people are involved in arts, than in the military servings. This implies that by distributing the same amount of money to support each artist and soldier, the later group of people will either receive more money or this surplus will go to a purchase of weapons and fulfillment of other needs. Such an allocation will not be fair and could lead to a lack of funding for a creative part of population.
Secondly, the advantages that are gained by investing more money in the arts considerably outweigh those from an equal distribution of funds. For instance, the arts fill people’s minds with positive thinking, making them more open-minded and creative. The number of people who suffer from dementia, Alzheimer’s, depression and other disorders constantly increases and more than a half of mentally ill population copes with their diseases by doing arts. Is it not enough of a reason to pay more attention to arts and make more investments?
If these two arguments are not strong enough to support my point of view, I believe that the last one is: the connecting rope between arts and military is tighter and more apparent that one may think. The future soldiers who once took the arts classes and were former artist by profession will have a different way of thinking, which will make them unique on a battlefield. Thus, by having a stronger financial support for arts, the military services of a government can benefit even more than from an equal allocation of the funds.
In conclusion, I would like to enforce the importance of giving more financial support to the arts which is believed to not only create more creative and talented people but will also increase the number of creative soldiers, whose minds will be inclined toward positive thinking and a world peace.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86351706037 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76201796835 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517060367454 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4758802536 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.357142857 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2142857143 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105776722609 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433673120652 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0257160900888 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0641712420545 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323608681415 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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