GRE sample issue pool essay topic 39
The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Witnessing greatness of some individuals is considered as one of the blessed achievements of any persons' lifetime. We have had only handful of great persons throughout the history who glorified the world. While achievement of some was recognized during their lifetime, others' success had to wait few more lifetime to earn the recognition. The prompt suggests that the greatness of any individual is decided by people after their time but not by their contemporaries. I, however, mostly disagree with the prompt for following reasons.
First of all, whether the acknowledgement of immensity of work of any individual is done in their lifetime or by coming generation depends upon the field of the person. People recognize most of the area of achievement instantly while some areas take time. For instance, in sports, the greatness of any particular player is decided by the people living in his time only. Later generations might also agree on that but the success is valued by the contemporaries already. In football, Pele and Maradona were the greatest footballer their generations have ever seen and people feel lucky to see them play. However, in our time, Ronaldo and Messi are the greatest and we have already felt their greatness. They do not have to wait for next generation. In fact, the next generation might undermine their talent seeing players of their own time like we now value Pele quite less than as his contemporaries. However, if we take the case of painting, the greatness is decided by the future generations in many circumstances. To take an example, Da Vinci and Picasso's paintings had no value in their lifetime, while, now, we consider them the masterpiece of entire human civilization. So, the valuation of greatness highly depends upon the area where the individuals achieved their success.
Also, the appreciation of the vastness also depends upon whether the consequences of their work lie in their time or will be seen in the future. To illustrate, the work of many notable scientists like, Nikola Tesla, Archimedes, Galaleo etc. were not considered of any worth in their time. Their contemporaries called them mad and even punished some. However, in this time, their findings have helped us solve the mysteries of the universe. Many of our recent inventions lie on their theories and hypothesis. This is because their theories had no use in their time as there were not many technologies to test and utilize those ideas. Now that we have developed new techniques and are seeking for more, their knowledge has come in use. In contrast, some kings and their fighters won war and united a lot of the smaller kingdoms to built an entire nation. Their work had instant effects and people acknowledged their greatness during their lifetime. So, the decision of greatness also depends upon the time of the enlightening of significance of their work.
The choice of whether the greatness is decided by people after them or by their contemporaries is subjective to many factors and cannot be decided alone by some debatable arguments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, for instance, in contrast, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2561.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 506.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06126482213 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86743638301 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47628458498 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7971703622 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.4642857143 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0714285714 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21428571429 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163298609541 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539327746242 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410487782305 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131005121922 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303280475459 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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