Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement emphasizes primarily on the a notion that self-interest and personal discipline is the only way to learn and gain knowledge. Since centuries and right from the first humans to walk on this planet, we humans have developed and evolved continuously. Primitive humans obviously didn't have schools or colleges moreover from where they could learn to hunt and survive. They developed those skills slowly on their own and by observing others. This led to new inventions and the knowledge has been passed through out the world through books and other sources of learning. So this makes a stance that learning is primarily not a matter of personal discipline, which can be developed through training, observation and motivation which is the primary motto of any school, college or other institutions.
A human being right from their birth are exposed to a variety of things. After a few years we start to develop interest on few of these things and soon we realize that you might be good at one of those. Here comes the role of any institution, i.e, in nurturing and developing these skills, so that, that person becomes well versed in that area of interest and might set a career for the rest of their lives. The Ex-Indian captain Mahendra Singh Dhoni was a goalkeeper back in his childhood. His coach saw his skill set and introduced him to cricket and developed his keeping skills. Now he is widely regarded as one of the best cricketers to have ever played that sport.It is evident that schools and colleges are responsible for a successful career.
Secondly, every human is different from one another. Different people have different perspectives, beliefs, interests and goals. Not everyone share the same IQ. People with low intellect face a really hard time to get through college or school, not due to the lack of personal interest, but because they lack those skills to get through. Schools and other learning institutions recognize these people and give them a special care and thus get them to a point in their career which wouldn't have been possible without their help. Hence Schools and colleges not only nurture the existing skills but also help to overcome your difficulties and improve self-confidence.
It is true that all great minds graduated from Harvard or Cambridge. Einstein for instance, never got through school and always told that school never helped him and he is one of the greatest minds to ever walk on this plant, but such was his IQ. He had an intellect level most people couldn't come close to and because of his undying interest and his unparalleled discipline towards science, the world has technologically evolved to its present state. But there are very few of such examples that prove that personal discipline and interests over weigh the positive outcomes that school and colleges offer.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2366.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 476.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97058823529 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6459815068 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533613445378 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.807354562 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.545454545 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6363636364 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77272727273 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184756035994 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474716917699 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634197545157 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106300536321 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423129965098 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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