Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
This topic raises the controversial issue of what are the motivations of students in order to be focused in learning. Indisputably, the personal discipline of each student plays a fundamental role in the progress of learning process. Nevertheless, schools and colleges contribute to the learning progress of their students and bolster them with motives and rewards. Thus, I generally disagree with the viewpoint that learning is a basically a matter of discipline and I would argue that educational units play a crucial role in learning process of their students.
First of all, the educational institutions assist their students in learning by granted them awards. One common award is scholarships which is an enormous financial support for students especially in primary universities where the tuition fees are not affordable for the majority of students. To illustrate, let us look at the example of Columbia University which grants a full scholarship for the students of New York colleges with the requirement of course that these student will have graduated as first of their colleges. Thus, this motivation encourages and bolster the struggle of students to enhance their learning.
Moreover, educational institutions possess the knowledge to interpolate the learning process with the labor market. To illustrate, let us look at the example of California University. All these informatics companies who flourished in Silicon Valley have their eyes on the senior year students. They are looking for future and skilled co-workers who will grasp them and take advantage of their competitors. However, only the students who are indeed skilled and have graduated with an excellent degree could been desirable for these companies. Thus, a direct occupation after the graduation of course is a huge motivation to study harsh.
In conclusion, the personal discipline play admittedly a significant role in the progress of learning of students, yet its contribution to this process in comparison with the role of the academic institutions is minor.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, in conclusion, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 318.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4465408805 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07533021758 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509433962264 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3424818928 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.466666667 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207957590787 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729180958917 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481036100453 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129478999569 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615660937427 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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