The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author cites that modifying water flow of first five floors of sunnyside increases their savings by managing whole tower's water flow. To support his claim author also provide some baseless information about their increase in profit. However, this claim is full of loopholes and flourish questions regarding its assertion. Like, on which basis he claim that corporation's profit increases only because of modifying water flow? How many profit they get from this modification? Is expenditure less than profit or not? Due to this kind of loopholes, we can say that this argument have baseless information.
First of all, on which basis he can say that modifying five house waterflow increase whole building's water flow? According to this, we can say that he have not any kind of right to talk about whole building on basis of five houses. The author should give specific numeric data how it effect to other houses of building. He also give some kind of relationship between modifyiing five house water flow and whole building. So, one can easily understand profit of this modification.
Second question rises with this argument is that how many profit they get after this modification? Is profit is more than cost of this modification or not? In claim author cites that there is no available of actual data but we can say that it will increase saving of sunnyside building. If the author wants to convince public with his claim, he must provide exact detail of profit. He also provide numeric data how much the modification costs to them? So, one can actually estimate profit of this modification. Hence, this kind of information increases faithfulness of public whose houses are in this building.
Furthermore, it also stir up question how much person suffers from the problem of low pressure water? The author cites that some people complain about low pressure of water is not important. The author should provide information about how the complaint really suffers? He also provide information that it will be solved or not. Because problem for some people, one cannot consider profit for whole society.
In conclusion, I just want to say that The author should provide valid information, numeric data and it's effect on people. Hence, to prove this claim valid the author should modify his data with facts and numeric information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 357, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'claims'.
Suggestion: claims
... its assertion. Like, on which basis he claim that corporation apos;s profit increase...
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Line 1, column 446, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun profit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many profits'.
Suggestion: many profits
...ly because of modifying water flow? How many profit they get from this modification? Is exp...
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Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effects'?
Suggestion: effects
...hould give specific numeric data how it effect to other houses of building. He also gi...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gives'.
Suggestion: gives
...ct to other houses of building. He also give some kind of relationship between modif...
^^^^
Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun profit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many profits'.
Suggestion: many profits
...on rises with this argument is that how many profit they get after this modification? Is pr...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 391, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...provide exact detail of profit. He also provide numeric data how much the modification ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'stirs'?
Suggestion: stirs
... this building. Furthermore, it also stir up question how much person suffers fro...
^^^^
Line 7, column 278, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...w the complaint really suffers? He also provide information that it will be solved or n...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'regarding', 'second', 'so', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.270454545455 0.240241500013 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.120454545455 0.157235817809 77% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0909090909091 0.0880659088768 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.05 0.0497285424764 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0568181818182 0.0444667217837 128% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.134090909091 0.12292977631 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0159090909091 0.0406280797675 39% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.57415577515 2.79330140395 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0204545454545 0.030933414821 66% => OK
Particles: 0.00227272727273 0.0016655270985 136% => OK
Determiners: 0.0659090909091 0.0997080785238 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0318181818182 0.0249443105267 128% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0204545454545 0.0148568991511 138% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2364.0 2732.02544248 87% => OK
No of words: 391.0 452.878318584 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.04603580563 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.350383631714 0.366273622748 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.230179028133 0.280924506359 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171355498721 0.200843997647 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109974424552 0.132149295362 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57415577515 2.79330140395 92% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 219.290929204 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432225063939 0.48968727796 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.3904671439 55.4138127331 82% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6194690265 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0384615385 23.380412469 64% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.0786532215 59.4972553346 44% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9230769231 141.124799967 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0384615385 23.380412469 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.576923076923 0.674092028746 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.21349557522 153% => OK
Readability: 38.0563643518 51.4728631049 74% => OK
Elegance: 1.85 1.64882698954 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171529629656 0.391690518653 44% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128169273539 0.123202303941 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0999898621145 0.077325440228 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.473274096161 0.547984918172 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14269474067 0.149214159877 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648016110863 0.161403998019 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413387219671 0.0892212321368 46% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.330773392478 0.385218514788 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.103139711165 0.0692045440612 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127503036391 0.275328986314 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318957560127 0.0653680567796 49% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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