The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It is dazzling to just look at some of the cutting-edge products and facilities. This develoment the of civilization, at least in a material aspect, altered the contmemporians’ way of living significantly differentiated from the people of the past. Although this change have had a salubrious effect on many respects, people became less hardy and independent.
Granted, it is evident that the conveniences of current life style allowed more free time to think about the themselves and chance to select their jobs nearly indefinitely. If the people properly find who themselves are and pioneer their way of living, these people would be strong and independent individuals. Take an example of the Youtubers today. They do what they want to and even make a living by doing so. In the past, such a thing couldn’t happen. They must have a few choices like a to become a farmer, merchants, and technicians. However, with the affluence of current society, society could allow those guys do whatever they prefer. These guys could feel self-satisfaction and because they follow the path they like, they feel more happy and therefore more healthy mentally or even physically.
However, it is entirely different story to those who fail to find true selves of them and get a career they want. Unlike the previous people, these guys could suffer from depression and even commit a suicide. This is because someone who could not find the true meaning of their lives will suffer from adverse mental problems. The people in the middle ages did not often face that kind of problem. They usually got a job according to the classes they belong or just follow the path of the ancestors. Unlike them, the contemporians suffer from self-recognition problem and even though someone finds the true self of him, there are still left plagues. To become what they want, they would be stressed by the competition. Even worse, if they became the loser of the competition, they could feel the bitterness of the defeat throughout their lives, making the mental illness like depression occur.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
It is dazzling to just look at some of the cutting-edge products and facilities. T...
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Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'themselves'?
Suggestion: the; themselves
...e allowed more free time to think about the themselves and chance to select their jobs nearly ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, still, therefore, at least, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 344.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03779069767 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89695802625 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55523255814 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8500819937 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2105263158 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1052631579 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05263157895 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0564644040635 0.243740707755 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0190167518708 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0286885104756 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0414499339033 0.150359130593 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0131580856525 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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