“Men and women, because of their inherent physical differences, are not equally suited for many tasks.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.”
Winston Churchill once made a famous remark that it is not always about the size of the dog in the fight, it is about the size of the fight in the dog. True to this statement, the world has come a long way as far as women's role in the society is concerned. Today, irrespective of gender, race or orientation, the world values the contribution that each individual makes for the betterment of mankind.
From an era when women were disenfranchised, today, we can see that some of the great political, social and technological leaders in the world are women, like an Aung Suu Kyu in Myanmar or an Angela Merkel in Germany. Even in the 17th or 18th century, it was patriarchy that hindered the empowerment of women as opposed to any sort of physical difference between men and women. Women were forced to be homemakers and educators and were forcibly kept away from such tasks which were tagged "masculine". Most of the time, it was purely pressuring from men that kept women out of power and positions of prestige and importance, as opposed to women's physical disposition.
But now, there is equal representation from both sexes in most, if not all areas. Women drive heavy motor vehicles, drive sports cars, serve in the army, are CEOs of technology companies and what not. A wave of feminist movement that started from the west and has gained momentum all over the world has engendered women empowerment. It is true that there are physical differences between the two sexes, however, this does not naturally imply that any sex is weaker than the other. There are famous women bodybuilders, boxing champions, and athletes. Women even make comebacks to competitive sports after their pregnancies. Some of the great astronauts in the world are also women, with Sunita Williams claiming the world record for spending the longest time in space. These achievements show that it is not about the task but the ability of the individual which is important.
Governments across the world are realizing the need and importance of women empowerment. They realize that, in a world, which is facing so many challenges, be it economic, social or environmental, they need the best brains to work on these issues to come up with lasting solutions. The world is recognizing and rewarding talent more and more. The disparity in recognizing and appreciating the contributions based on gender is becoming lesser.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...disenfranchised, today, we can see that some of the great political, social and technologic...
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...t away from such tasks which were tagged 'masculine'. Most of the time,...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...etitive sports after their pregnancies. Some of the great astronauts in the world are also ...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...rtant. Governments across the world are realizing the need and importance of women empowe...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...me up with lasting solutions. The world is recognizing and rewarding talent more and more. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, sort of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94088669951 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92536189911 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546798029557 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5158081563 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.578947368 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47368421053 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153095576742 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433172579254 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333520245266 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839857458451 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404422597275 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.