"Most people choose a career on the basis of such pragmatic considerations as the needs of the economy, the relative ease of finding a job, and the salary they can expect to make. Hardly anyone is free to choose a career based on his or her natural talents or interest in a particular kind of work."
The author raises a controversial issue that most of the people choose their carrier against their freewill, taking more of a pragmatic and prudent approach. Inadvertently, there are many places that a pragmatic consideration will help us to get a job. Nevertheless, the job satisfaction will only come when the worker is doing a job which they like a lot or very good at. Therefore, I disagree with the topic totally as this is not true in many cases and argue that choosing a career entirely depend upon the persons outlook and family background.
First of all, we have to consider the thought process of the person seeking the job. The nature of his thought process is dependent on the culture of a particular place where he belong to.To illaborate this further, let us look at an example of a guy, live in a remote village where he is surrounded only by farmers. He may never get the exposure of the city and his father with limited outlook may encourage him to farm only, rather than asking him to be rockstar in a band or a businessman in a city, as he is not having that exposure. Whereas, in a wealthy family where there is abundant supply of information with reputed family background may get several options unlike the farmer boy. In this circumstance, it is obvious that opting a job according to our own will is not the same for every person.
Furthermore, the economic condition and the population of a nation have a huge impact on the millennials as the availability of job is not the same in every country. Specifically, in India the population is high and the economy is not wealthy enough, so the people go by the simple path of getting a good education and opting for a good job which they are not at all good at just, only for the sake of good money. Whereas, in country like Island whose population is so low that they are short of worker in there industry is simply in the opposite position to the above mentioned country. Hence, all the evidences above prove that depending upon many factors the preferences of the people may get varied.
In conclusion, although taking a pragmatic cautious approach is good enough in certain countries ,the position is not the same in every part of the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 511, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...osing a career entirely depend upon the persons outlook and family background. First o...
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Line 2, column 178, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'belongs'.
Suggestion: belongs
... culture of a particular place where he belong to.To illaborate this further, let us l...
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Line 2, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...f a particular place where he belong to.To illaborate this further, let us look at...
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Line 2, column 538, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ity, as he is not having that exposure. Whereas, in a wealthy family where there is abu...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... just, only for the sake of good money. Whereas, in country like Island whose populatio...
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Line 4, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...oach is good enough in certain countries ,the position is not the same in every pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, whereas, in conclusion, first of all, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60858585859 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69488224554 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510101010101 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.3033040658 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.357142857 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2857142857 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.21951772744 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12194502828 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422389546349 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325841230263 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0730237605851 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626869758548 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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