A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
one shouldn't judge a dog by his ability to climb on trees. similarly, every individual has his own interests, his ideas, his perception to see the world and to choose his area of interest. The recommendation stated suggests that all students in the country should study the same national curriculum irrespective of their interests, till a certain time, until they are finally eligible to enter college. As stated earlier, I completely disagree to this recommendation since every student has the right to make their choices and follow their dreams.
Firstly, scientists have already proved that genes play a crucial role in defining an individual's skills. some individuals will be extremely good at calculations and at maths, they would be among the top scorers in this subject while the same person will have a very hard time studying the basic atomic structure. Here, as stated, scientists can conduct various tests on an individual to evaluate what he excels at and thus, find the right areas of expertise for him. now, this child will definitely acheive a lot if he focus">focuses on studying mathematics, but, if the same child is made to study science for a lot of time since he's weak at it, he will lose focus and this will thus hamper his progress with mathematics as well. Not only with maths and science, some students are genetically superior at physical activities like sports and they would definitely enjoy as well as learn subjects related to their areas of interests, but, if they're made to study biology just because the nation has made it mandatory, it can definitely ruin their career as an athlete and also, the individual would have a hard time in studying something where his interests do not lie. hence, focusing on a child's area of interests would definitely boost him in the right direction.
also, even if the nation gives an individual the right to choose subjects once he has reached college, it might be very late by then. Maybe, the individual who excelled at maths in his early age had to devote majority of his time in doing subjects which he wasn't good at. now, after a lot of years since most of his time went on focusing on subjects he was average at, he couldn't really focus on the skills he was good at for long. he might have to cut time from the subjects of his interest to make sure he could pass the ones he wasn't strong at. similarly, the genetically superior individual who could have been a athlete and represent the nation someday was made to do calculus for years cutting of his sports time. he would have managed to clear calculus but, with the sacrifice of the interests he was really good at. hence, when these individuals reach college, they have already lost their super powers and are now just average at the subjects they could've been masters at.
As a result of these statements, I strongly believe that by making a certain cirriculum mandatory for everyone, the nation is not just hampering the individual's potential, but also the potential of the nation's best resources.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...otential, but also the potential of the nations best resources.
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...otential of the nations best resources.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, really, similarly, so, then, thus, well, while, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2558.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88167938931 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6501910527 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477099236641 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 799.2 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.3782303737 60.3974514979 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.111111111 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1111111111 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106629327565 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418852977458 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599462609362 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837312010073 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280695052557 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.