A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting yo | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

One shouldn't judge a dog by his ability to climb on trees. Similarly, every individual has his own interests, his ideas, his perception to see the world and to choose his area of interest. The recommendation stated suggests that all students in the country should study the same national curriculum irrespective of their interests, till a certain time, until they are finally eligible to enter college. As stated earlier, I completely disagree to this recommendation since every student has the right to make their choices and follow their dreams. Firstly, scientists have already proved that genes play a crucial role in defining an individual's skills. Some individuals will be extremely good at calculations and at maths, they would be among the top scorers in this subject while the same person will have a very hard time studying the basic atomic structure. Here, as stated, scientists can conduct various tests on an individual to evaluate what he excels at and thus, find the right areas of expertise for him. Now, this child will definitely acheive a lot if he focuses on studying mathematics, but, if the same child is made to study science for a lot of time since he's weak at it, he will lose focus and this will thus hamper his progress with mathematics as well. Not only with maths and science, some students are genetically superior at physical activities like sports and they would definitely enjoy as well as learn subjects related to their areas of interests, but, if they're made to study biology just because the nation has made it mandatory, it can definitely ruin their career as an athlete and also, the individual would have a hard time in studying something where his interests do not lie. Hence, focusing on a child's area of interests would definitely boost him in the right direction. Also, even if the nation gives an individual the right to choose subjects once he has reached college, it might be very late by then. Maybe, the individual who excelled at maths in his early age had to devote majority of his time in doing subjects which he wasn't good at. Now, after a lot of years since most of his time went on focusing on subjects he was average at, he couldn't really focus on the skills he was good at for long. He might have to cut time from the subjects of his interest to make sure he could pass the ones he wasn't strong at. Similarly, the genetically superior individual who could have been a athlete and represent the nation someday was made to do calculus for years cutting of his sports time. He would have managed to clear calculus but, with the sacrifice of the interests he was really good at. Hence, when these individuals reach college, they have already lost their super powers and are now just average at the subjects they could've been masters at.  As a result of these statements, I strongly believe that by making a certain cirriculum mandatory for everyone, the nation is not just hampering the individual's potential, but also the potential of the nation's best resources.     <div> </div>

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, really, similarly, so, then, thus, well, while, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3972.0 2235.4752809 178% => OK
No of words: 610.0 442.535393258 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.51147540984 5.05705443957 129% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96972615649 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 8.04805992002 2.79657885939 288% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445901639344 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1103.4 704.065955056 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 23.0359550562 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 231.403101871 60.3974514979 383% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 264.8 118.986275619 223% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 40.6666666667 23.4991977007 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.21951772744 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0663311586008 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397350026365 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628141804753 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0663311586008 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.6 14.1392134831 209% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.96 48.8420337079 29% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.3 12.1743820225 175% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 21.37 12.1639044944 176% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.8971910112 147% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 11.2143820225 161% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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