“A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The claim addresses a controversial issue of whether a unified national curriculum should be imposed in all schools or each school should have a freedom to adapt the curriculum to corresponding circumstances. While I agree that some common guidelines are important to follow by any educational institution while developing the curriculum, the requirement of using the same national curriculum will impede the schools from providing high quality education.
A unified curriculum assumes the similarity between schools and the ability of schools to teach the curriculum exactly the same way. However, it might not be the case, since the level of teachers as well as students aptitudes differ from school to school. For example, in rural areas, with low density population, the number of teachers as well as students are limited and sometimes one teacher can teach different subjects or teach the same class to different age groups. In contrast, schools in cities can boast of assigning a teacher to each subject. Obviously, the quality of teaching the same curriculum in rural areas will differ from those in urban metropolies. Therefore, achieving a uniformity in education would be implausible and would require elimination of different factors.
The introduction of unified national curriculum might be problematic in multinational and multyethinc countries or with coutries with different climatic zones. In the first case, the unified curriculum must incorporate ethnical differences and traditions, such as languages and history of different regions. However, due to its unified nature, these subjects will be compulsory for studying to students from totally different regions, thus, swelling out the number of classes and consuming students' time. In the case of large countries with diffferent regions, the unified curriculum must also adapt subjects necessary for these regions, for example, to teach students how to act during the tsunami or earthquake. While these knowledge might appear useful for some regions, other areas might not appreciate their importance. Thus, the unified curriculum either needs to ignore geographical, climactic and ethnical differences between various parts of the country, or incorporate all the varieties of local factors, making it implausible to study within a limited time.
However, the unified curriculum might be beneficial in terms of seamless transfers between schools and making the assessment of knowledge easier. However, in order to benefit from such uniformity, the schools should be given a freedom to decide on which subjects to teach, just following the guidelines of national curriculum. In other words, the unified curriculum should be introduced cautiously, taking into account all the possible factors that might affect differnt groups of society.
To recapitulate the above evidence, it would be impossible to achieve the uniformity of educational system in general, and therefore, introducing the same curriculum to schools might only harm both students and teachers. Instead, schools should be given a freedom to decide on local curriculum and just adhere some national guidelines to make the curriculum more or less uniform across the nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: freedom
... all schools or each school should have a freedom to adapt the curriculum to correspondin...
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Suggestion:
...ll as students are limited and sometimes one teacher can teach different subjects...
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Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'these knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; these knowledges
...during the tsunami or earthquake. While these knowledge might appear useful for some regions, o...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: freedom
...uniformity, the schools should be given a freedom to decide on which subjects to teach, j...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'freedom'.
Suggestion: freedom
...chers. Instead, schools should be given a freedom to decide on local curriculum and just ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in contrast, in general, such as, as well as, in other words, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2732.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 488.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59836065574 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95601489385 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46106557377 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 857.7 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9751510902 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.789473684 118.986275619 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6842105263 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73684210526 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168444769888 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621884012401 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392373553013 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112145587055 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273120501979 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.1392134831 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 48.8420337079 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.8971910112 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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