A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting yo

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

The curriculum of a primary or secondary school varies according to the school or college. A country can have more that one education curriculum in its schools. These different curriculums use different methods of teaching, use different textbooks and other materials, and may even contain different subjects. If a student was to change from one school to another school he needs to make sure he joins in another school of the same curriculum otherwise It would be a painful experience for 3 to 4 months as the school norms, way of teachers, subjects are completely different. The above claim that all the students who have not yet entered college need to follow the same curriculum in their schools.

The reason for different curriculums is to allow diversity in a country. for example, in India, one of the largest secular countries, people from different religions and different traditions and cultures are often found together in big cities. The way of learning for each of these religions differ. So, Every major religion in India has its education curriculum. India is a country of 28 states. Every state has its own beliefs, cultures, history and its curriculum which follow these. Now, these curriculums pose a problem. Every state curriculum textbooks have great stories written about its state and the emphasis is given on its regional language. And when the students all over the country complete their secondary education they come with distinct and often contradictory ideas.

This regional and religion diversification of students leave them with a motive of disparagement for other regions and religions. for example, a major religion in India considers the cow to be sacred and holy while another religion considers it as their diet. These curriculums in each state focus only on their religion and their culture and when these students carry these to their college, It might hurt them.

A new national curriculum must be developed which teaches the beauty of the country and not their state. This new curriculum must have songs written on national heroes, national monuments. It must include the political and cultural aspect of all the states and religions in a country. This new curriculum should speak no less about culture and must fill the students with patriotism for their country rather than their religion or state. This curriculum holds a country united.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, second, so, while, as to, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16195372751 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71234175588 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473007712082 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6287480752 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2727272727 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6818181818 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.09090909091 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165652247636 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589981701351 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037409610313 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104587334754 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031329920269 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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