In order for any work of art — for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song — to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
How the general society received the modernists architecture projects back in the sixties? It was accepted by most people? It was understandable to most people? Probably it was not. The author states that in order to have merit, any work of art must be understandable to most people. But actually, when we deal with vanguard art, almost by definition we affirm that it will not be understandable by the majority and in the following two paragraphs we sustain that point presenting historic examples.
To begin, consider the modernist architecture movement that took place after the Bauhaus creation in Germany in the 1930’s. It was a truly vanguardist way of thinking and presenting architecture and design. The movement arrived in Brazil in the 1940’s when some artists and intellectuals, running away from the Second World War, moved to the country and began to work and stimulate the progress of those ideas. For instance, in São Paulo downtown, we can still see the traces of those architects in the streets, houses, office and residential buildings. Today the society understands the importance of those days and give a lot of credit for this kind of art, but back in the sixties and seventies it was not like this. Consequently, many famous European architects arrived in Brazil being no one and had hard times to survive until they could be known. The above example illustrates that art is truly not just a contemporary phenomenon. It is alive, vibrant and dynamic.
Further, we could base our line or argumentation on the cubist expression also. This was another vanguard artistic movement not fully accepted at its time. Consider the work of Pablo Picasso, for instance. Les Demoiselles d’Avignon, Guernica or even the artist’s famous portraits where not consider art by most art critics at his time. Today his work has an enormous and inestimable value as expression of those times, as part of the history of occidental art. Moreover, research has consistently demonstrated that even if one cannot truly understand some piece of art, this experience activates some part of human brain so we cannot give merit only to what he or she believe to understand.
I can concede that what the author has presented could be at first sight true since the main reason for which art exists is do be a way of communication and expression. Thus, if one part (the public) does not understand the message, does art make any sense at all? However, it is important to but things in a historic perspective. We have to accept that time and history are dynamic and our societies are not immutable. A work of vanguard art today might be understandable and appreciate by future generations only. Therefore, art sometimes is just art. Arts for the arts. Expression for expression itself.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'modernists'' or 'modernist's'?
Suggestion: modernists'; modernist's
How the general society received the modernists architecture projects back in the sixti...
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Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('truly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('vanguardist') instead of another adjective.
...n in Germany in the 1930's. It was a truly vanguardist way of thinking and presenting architec...
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Line 9, column 75, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... argumentation on the cubist expression also. This was another vanguard artistic mov...
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Line 9, column 679, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...annot give merit only to what he or she believe to understand. I can concede that ...
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Line 13, column 125, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...the main reason for which art exists is do be a way of communication and expressio...
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Line 13, column 530, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is sometimes
...future generations only. Therefore, art sometimes is just art. Arts for the arts. Expression...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02360515021 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96434276085 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530042918455 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.7879599467 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6071428571 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6428571429 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201535997973 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057607648212 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686372849356 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134507896978 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539640858068 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.