As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the thinking ability of humans for themselves is suffered by technology advances. Indisputably, technology has brought damaging effects such as global warming and air pollution. Nevertheless, breakthroughs in this sector are driven by the human intelligence and have to be managed by the human to keep working. Also, technicians should be trained with cutting-edge skills in order to deal with the rising need for controlling smart devices like satellites and 3D designing. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that technology advances could jeopardize our thinking and imagination, and would argue that this is not only revolutionizing the world but also enhances human brainpower.
First of all, no matter how cutting-edge technology is, it has to be developed and by mankind intellectuality and to get the desired final results. So, human’s skills are not going to be replaced by these smart instruments. To illustrate, let us look at the example of computers and connected devices like printers. They should take the orders from their users to solve a problem or to how to print what. In this circumstance, not only human thinking and problem-solving capabilities are not affected, but it saves time and brings convenient. Consequently, it is pretty obvious that as technology improves, our brainpower and skills are also improved.
Admittedly, advancing technology in a great pace has brought some environmental problems, however, recently in the latest years of the 21st century, there is an ever-increasing universal awareness from environmentalists to politicians about severe consequences on our lives. This is true especially when it comes to global warming and air pollution which are the result of overusing resources in different industries that therefore yield to harsh heat output to the earth’s atmosphere. So, specialists are now tending to develop the so-called green technologies, which are environmentally friendly, to keep the ameliorate the ongoing situation. However, the above argument does not constitute sufficient support to claim that technology advancement ruins the mental abilities of us. Because scientists and other people, in developing or using the technology should do the most of the task with their brains, the mental power remains at its high state.
In conclusion, although there are some side-effects on using technology these days, by developing green technology and concern other detrimental causes, we can ameliorate the situation by even better thinking and analysis which also makes our brainpower remain superb. Modern technologies can be incredible tools supporting us on every hard and dangerous work but they cannot make us dependent totally due to our unique brainpower.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, as to, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 427.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55971896956 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26012139866 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587822014052 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8206176786 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.888888889 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7222222222 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15728765763 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477618301049 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357950810633 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933165453251 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359528843308 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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