People who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it
people who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are the ones in the field of education, research and politics to name a few. they propose new ideologies, make new innovations and lay down policies for the betterment of the society. if they are critical, then it would lead to further growth otherwise there will be a full stop to their toil and labour. thus, the given argument may be agreed partially but not to a greatest extent.
further, we can argue with the example cited below. According to the famous saying," practise makes a man perfect", it could be said that any kind of perfection is attained only through practising and revising. When J.K. Rowling wrote the first book if the Harry Potter series, she would have scrutinized and made corrections at least for 100 times before releasing the last copy if the book. Had she not been critical about it, the book would not be a number 1 seller. Similarly, batsman like Sachin Tendulkar who played for the Indian cricket team would not have accolades for his performance if he had not been critical. only by means of practising strenuously before every match, he was able to achieve his feat. Moreover, if students were not critical about their studies, then their future could be a question mark. In addition to the above examples we can remind ourselves of the noteworthy contributions given by researchers, engineers and scientists. To carry out a particular task, they are not only committed to their work but also critical so that they could achieve more by their thinking process. take for instance the automatic gears, airbags and sensors in a car for the comfort and safety of the passengers. All this was possible only because the person's who invented them were critical about the different features and thought about what could be the source of improvement. if the Wright brothers were not critical, aeroplanes would not be found and human beings would have resorted to other modes of transport.In this contemporary world, all of us would have lacked the comfort and time-saving mechanisms of the flight.
On the contrary, there are situations where the deeply committed members were not critical of what they did. The best example could be the monetization that took place in india few years back. Even though it was a great plan to get rid of black money from india and to reduce corruption, people all over india would not have suffered if proper measures were taken to make sure that middle class and poor could take and use money for their daily needs from the banks. The proportion of Professors pursuing research are getting minimized as they are not critical.
thus, to close, it can be stated that, albeit most of the deeply committed are critical, there are few who could strive to make things right so that a perfect outcome could be expected. commitment and being critical alone could yield fruitful results which has been summarized in the above paragraphs with suitable examples.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, then, thus, at least, for instance, in addition, kind of, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2487.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 509.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88605108055 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58825187881 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542239685658 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.025488959 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.045454545 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1363636364 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184689024981 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054834288437 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107375711321 0.0758088955206 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13556804622 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779412373638 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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