People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Humans have evolved over millions of years to become intelligent beings capable of using their wits to get their way. They have also evolved the ability to feel emotions and make decisions, however the prompt has said that there are factors at play that are not of our own making. I agree with this statement for two reasons and disagree with it for one reason.
Firstly, people’s behavior may not be of their own making because of how they are raised. To illustrate, take a child who has been born in an impoverished home with 4 other siblings in a North Philadelphia home to a single parent who execrates at her own children and has a drinking problem. The children end up having an acerbic tone of voice and their own drinking problem when they grow up after observing their own mother doing so. This means that the children learned this behavior from their mother and not through their own conscious decision-making.
In addition, many people modify their behavior to cover up their truculent nature. Many people are naturally rebellious and are really miscreants in disguise. This is best shown in William Goldberg’s compelling classic novel “Lord of The Flies” in that a hand full of traveling survivors on an island unleash their savage nature by killing one rather calm and unruffled friend named “Piggy”. Since this is so, the savage nature of these lost travelers getting unleashed only days after leaving their more civilized town shows how people’s civilized behavior in the civilized land is only a cover up for their true uncivilized and even mulcult behavior.
On the other hand, people can learn from their mistake and modify their behavior without the help of outside forces. For example, when a public speaker appears nervous and anxious in front of large audiences due to unforeseen forces that triggers his or her phobia of it, he or she can decide to modify their behavior in several ways. One way can be a Harvard graduate’s famous communications advice called “fake it ‘till you make it” where calm behavior is reinforced after several trials of trying to appear calm during presentations or by using behavioral reinforcement coined by B.F. Skinner where behavior will be changed to appear more calm by adding or removing stimuli to the speaker. All in all, there are several ways where a person can modify their behavior in their own making though their original behavior may be due to external forces whatever they may be.
In conclusion, people’s behavior can be due to many kinds of external forces such as learning it from their parents and not themselves or covering up their savage nature by a more civilized guise. However, people can modify their behavior after it is determined by these kinds of forces by their own making in numerous ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 384, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'communications'' or 'communication's'?
Suggestion: communications'; communication's
...can be a Harvard graduate's famous communications advice called 'fake it 'till ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 473.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01691331924 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76334535952 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513742071882 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.4790100428 60.3974514979 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.588235294 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8235294118 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213026625622 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856245419058 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514156947774 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131777124019 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279766113032 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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