People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
we may have different behaviors when facing different things. As for the same thing, two people may have different behavior bases on their different determination. Admittedly, there are some people whose behavior is largely determined by forces. however, most of us make our decision by our own making.
As we all know, almost of women could not stop buying goods in a large discount even if they do not need. some old parents are prone to buy something which logo on advertisement is "longivity" or "panacea". Additionally, we must obey laws and regulations in our society. Those behaviors are largely determined by forces.
however, there are many other important things are determined by our own making. Let's take graduation for an example, when facing graduation, some people chose to work, while others chose to go abroad to pursue a higher degree. they are all based on thier own making.
What's more, some people make decision based on both forces and their own making.
Martin Luther King conducted a discourse to appeal the equality of black people. He eradicated the Jim Crow laws and achieve the equality for African Americans.
In sum, the statement is not comprehensive, and I largely disagree with it. I think most of people make their decision by their own making.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...and I largely disagree with it. I think most of people make their decision by their own making...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, while, as for, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 58.6224719101 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1106.0 2235.4752809 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 214.0 442.535393258 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16822429907 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 4.55969084622 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05367306811 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 215.323595506 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588785046729 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 704.065955056 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4643037883 60.3974514979 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.125 118.986275619 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.375 23.4991977007 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207683093057 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742868202328 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611960605079 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112499624941 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724844179086 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 48.8420337079 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 100.480337079 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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