Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
While growing up, children should master certain skills in order to live better lives. Adulthood brings responsibilities and duties, taxes and budget planning into the life of everyone and it is important for teenagers to learn how to deal with all this attributes of adult life. School as the main resource of information for the student should give them not only academic knowledge, but also educate them in areas such as taxation, basics of law, finances, planning, etc.
The first reason is that schools are the best place for teenagers to learn it. Schools have enough resources to make this part of education highly qualified and comprehensible by hiring experts of the field who can work with children to explicate finer points of the matter. For example, managing finances is quiet complicated but incredibly necessary skill. If special time was given to learn it at school from people with educational and practical background in planning it would be very useful for students, as all of them are going to encounter problem of good financial management. Moreover, financially educated young people are beneficial for the overall economy because if they spend and invest more wisely, they will have higher income and the economy will flourish. For the government it will also bring profit through taxation and in the long term run will cover all expenditure on such extra education of students.
While this essay propounds that schools should give more knowledge about non-academic aspects of the adult life, one might argue that educational system shouldn't do parents job. From such point of view it may seem that to explain how to spend, cook, or pay taxes is what already done in the family. However, not all families pay enough attention to teach children such things for many different reasons. One possible cause, is that parents simply do not know how to deal with taxes or how to plan a budget. Another possible reason is that they don't have time or motivation to educate their child themselves, especially if they have tough, time-consuming jobs, and their children will grow up without acquiring essential skills for their future adult life. Yet, this won't happen if school adds non-academic educational programs in curriculum.
Overall, it can be seen that engagement of schools in students' mastering non-academic skills is plausible and expedient, as it contribute in social development. System should give opportunities for everyone to gain proficiency in order to deal with all aspects of adulthood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 411.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15571776156 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7238787843 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56204379562 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.217904212 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.647058824 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1764705882 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19336287635 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678655448269 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376096649239 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135222713907 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210341829701 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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