Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Author claim represent the two viewpoints held by people. Author posits that some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive as competition will bring enthusiasm among leaders to perform better in order to be in competition whereas other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others as an essential quality of any leader is ‘co-operation’, leader cannot succeed alone, he/she needs co-operation from teams member to achieve success.
In any field, competition is must as competition spurs people to work diligently to achieve success. Today there are more than one brands of any product, thus companies need to work indefatigable to strive in this competitive world. Consider the brands of mobile, back in past, there were merely a competition between mobile companies as there were only few companies who are developing mobile phone. Considering current situation, there are some many brands of mobile phone that companies need to provide novel features to strive in market and also companies are introducing new version of mobile phone too frequently, so that it can excite people to choose their brands over others. Thus, in my opinion, successful leaders may it be in government, industry or in any other fields must require competition as it forces leaders to come up with creative ideas. Competition is also proved better for people as in above case people will able to use mobile phones consisting of more innovative features.
However, Co-operation is a key to success. If Leader is not willing to cooperate then competition will attribute to exacerbate the loss. Leader unwilling to cooperate may create chaos among the teams and will never able to achieve success. History provides us plethora of example where leaders unwilling to cooperate with his/her teams member had led to failure and made leaders deprive of his/her powers. Consider current situation, where for India’s people, Narendra Modi is considered as best leader, will it be possible if his own team members were against him? Will they help Narendra modi during campaigns? Thus, for a leader to success, he/she should cooperate with their team members and involve them in decision making, it will led to gaining of trust and loyalty from his/her team members. Leaders unwilling to put trust in his/her team member and not involving them in decision making then he/she may instigate a ill-will among his/her team member which will lead to alienating his/her team member among him/her.
On wrapping up, Cooperation is important factor in achieving success while working in team. A leader unwilling to cooperate with his/her team may lead to bringing spite among his/her team member. Though, competition is one of the contributing factors to success but if there is no cooperation among leader and his/her team member than competition will actually contribute in exacerbating the situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ever, Co-operation is a key to success. If Leader is not willing to cooperate then...
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...cision making then he/she may instigate a ill-will among his/her team member whic...
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...ntribute in exacerbating the situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, so, then, thus, whereas, while, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28392484342 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8617873049 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46764091858 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 102.409422177 60.3974514979 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.210526316 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2105263158 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375745933081 0.243740707755 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117562362148 0.0831039109588 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140619405521 0.0758088955206 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267422246528 0.150359130593 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.199069251917 0.0667264976115 298% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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