Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
A student enters a college to sharpen his skills and become capable enough to make a decent living.We can expect him to give his best only when he is in a field that interest him . If he is forced to enter an area that is unknown to him even if it gives him a slight chance to earn a job,there is no gaurantee he will do great in that job or even get a job.Therefore,according to me a college student should consider his talents and interest while choosing a field of study rather than a field on the basis of availablity of jobs.
The availability of jobs in any area is dependent upon the zeal of the person whose is studying that field.If the person is determined enough then he can convert any opportunity in their favor.For instance, jobs in area of computer science have seen a massive increase in the last 50-60 years.Before, the invention of computer everyting was mechanical.However, only due to the curiosity of certain indivuals who followed their passion instead of the then current job trend were able to convert their talent into one of the biggest revolutions in the technology sector.
Also, if students were to choose a career path based on the jobs availability, then the world would only have 2 or 3 career paths. Fields such as art, history, political science etc would never have been introdruced. The world wouldn't have artist like Picasso or Leonardo di Vinci , exceptional directors like James Cameron or Steven Speilberg and sports person like Serena Williams or Lionel Messi. Only because they followed their talent and passion and not some circumscribed path were they able to reach the top of their filed.
Hence, In recapitulation, Only when a person is able to persue their passion they are able to make something good with their life.Converting a job in any field is totally dependent on the zeal and hardwork of an individual.If he is focus enough there is chance that he might even create job in the desired field.However,if he follows a path just to get a job with little or no interest, there is no gaurantee he will land a job even with abundance of it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 369.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68292682927 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.955611335 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509485094851 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 23.0359550562 200% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 164.723584756 60.3974514979 273% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 216.0 118.986275619 182% => OK
Words per sentence: 46.125 23.4991977007 196% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 5.21951772744 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311515709135 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129862056032 0.0831039109588 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716619821324 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180043588057 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569645437553 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.7 14.1392134831 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.25 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.1743820225 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.8971910112 223% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.4 11.2143820225 182% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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