Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
As a young adolescent leaves the warmth of school life and enters college; he is overthrown by the question of choosing field of study. This is both an important as well as a tricky question because it defines the next twenty-thirty years of a student’s life. Students navigate this challenging question all the while adjusting to new unknown college life. This can prove to be pressurizing and the student may end up choosing wrong career path. Therefore, deciding career path requires judging of several parameters. The prompt suggests two opposing views when it comes to selecting college major. The former view point suggests deciding field of study based on talents and interests whereas, the latter posits selection based on job availability.
Although choosing the major on the basis on job availability can prove to be beneficial to both students and society in short term; its long term consequences are not so fertile. For instance, job market is always working according to trends and thus, changing trends can prove to be malignant. In the late 20th century engineering was the most sought after job in Indian market; however by the 2010s Indian diaspora moved towards MBA as the most sought job. Therefore, job trends are dynamic and selecting career on the basis on availability of jobs can be perilous. Moreover, selection of major on the basis of job availability can lead to lower unemployment in the long run, saturation of one field and lower entrepreneurship. Hence, I partially disagree that students choose jobs solely on the basis of job availability for 2 reasons.
To begin, when a student opts for a field based on his skills and interests; he is bound to be more productive and motivated to succeed in that field. In the early 1900s an economist major, Gordon Allport changed his major to psychology; where he came up with the concept of personality as a scientific field in psychology. This example, allows one to understand the role interest plays in career path and exploration. Similarly, the global boyband BTS are able to prove their mettle and passion by selecting a field that showcases their talents and interests. In doing so they are able to not only generate thousands of jobs but also inspire millions of young adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 346, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...sses competencies for a certain job but their is no job available in the market or th...
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Line 2, column 459, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...ut throat then the decision of choosing field according to those parameters can also ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91445427729 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74424130319 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522123893805 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.9227985908 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9411764706 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186658894359 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061317898479 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06141160617 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107926182761 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327558622765 0.0667264976115 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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