Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
An education system forms the backbone of the success of an individual which if utilised properly could lead to magnificient results. Knowledge is not only derived through education but also through experience. according to the famous saying "All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy", if an activity is monotonously carried out, it would only restrain the mind. Allow the mind to relax and great things could be expected out of it.
In the beginning, there were gurukuls where students acquired a wide range of learning from the sages through teaching and practising. A classroom environment was completely missing and the children learnt many things from their surroundings. As an example, consider the practise given to Bhima to shoot a fruit on the tree using his bow and arrow. The sage advised him to concentrate only on the fruit and to neglect the surroundings. This kind of an education, when given by means of practical demonstrations could not only make the person thorough with the subject but also enable to enhance the skills. such type of skills are totally missing nowadays.
One can witness a formal education pattern where a systematic curriculum is being followed and evaluation done on that basis. many schools offer only a book based learning which could make a child stressful. Moreover, for other activities, parents may have to resort to training institutes offering extra curricular activities. relaxation measures are nullified to a great extent.
Thus, it is the sole responsibility of the management and the government to provide a wide range of courses within the curriculum offering leisure activities for reducing mental tension. A stereotyped curriculum could only lead to a kid being tortured. Often, we come across news about young children committing suicides. The reason is that they are not made known the fact about life. education is not merely memorizing stuffs and answering in the exam. it is all about a person being able to face the challenges that he is going to meet in his life. Preparing in such a way is possible only by teaching them the lessons of life for the future.
Altogether, it could be concluded that for a person to move ahead in life by facing the challenges that await him in the near future, he should get an education that imparts life values and not a stereotyped curriculum. In such a case, he would not get stressed and would be able to live a healthy and peaceful life in accordance with the other members of the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, thus, kind of, of course, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96208530806 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79270404538 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547393364929 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9199666367 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0434782609 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.347826087 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.34782608696 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0837022776219 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0225026901226 0.0831039109588 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0260522333048 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0488215223245 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373570962047 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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