Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
We start learning from the moment we are born. Most of our life goes through the hybrid method of institutional and informal learning. There are many things that free our minds. And one of the most important of them is formal education. It teaches the customs, values, challenges, and other people’s lives and sets our minds free.
When we start going to school, we meet children from different believes and socio-economic statuses. Before them, we are around our families and families with similar beliefs and social standards. But in school, we are learning not only to read and write, we are also learning that other believes and standards exist, and we are obliged to honor them. A 6 years old Muslim girl when first goes to a school, meets other children and finds out that Allah isn’t the only god that all the people believe in. Also, this child is taught to honor others’ beliefs no matter she has the same belief or not.
When we study history, culture, science, and literature, we get to know what is happening all over the world and what happened in the last millions of years. We learn the history of life on the earth and the history of the evolution of the cultures. Therefore, information about the progress of humankind comes to our knowledge. This enables us to think about what makes it possible to this enormous progress, and we also find the answer in the books we learn to read. And we learn to make a decision by analyzing what people did in the past with similar situations and what was the consequences.
Further, formal education lets us know about the current situations of cultures, science, and technology. We come to know about literature, innovations, music, art, and sports. We get access to a library in a building where we visit almost every day, the school. This information sets our minds free by enabling the right paths to take which we would love to take and where we are good at. Moreover, we see what other fellow students are doing and how they are getting success or failing. If a boy is good at art, he would find some other students who are good at art and how the decisions they made in life affected their life and progress in art. The schools are the most diverse place to find people of diverse expertise and interests.
Though there are some unexpected things happening with formal education. Like students are being said which paths should be taken in life whether they like it or not, sometimes killing the free mind of a youngster. But we have to remember it’s the pressure which is created by the society and the economic situation of the community, not by the schools. So, when the thinking ability of a child is being restricted in a school, it is the society that is to blame, for that instance, not the institutional education system.
Therefore we have to admit that by teaching about cultures, history, beliefs, science and religions, schools are setting the youngsters’ minds free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
...school, we meet children from different believes and socio-economic statuses. Before the...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... of diverse expertise and interests. Though there are some unexpected things happen...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... the institutional education system. Therefore we have to admit that by teaching about...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2450.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 517.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73887814313 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53506548684 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479690522244 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9554288939 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.7407407407 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1481481481 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 5.21951772744 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163276784466 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516815828095 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529662604883 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104579325783 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498771856126 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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