Some people believe that scientific discoveries have given us a much better understanding of the world around us. Others believe that science has revealed to us that the world is infinitely more complex than we ever realized.
Scientific developments such as technological advances in genetics, neuroscience, cybernetics and so on, have led us to an unprecedented world in which numerous debates take place every moment throughout the world. As stated in the prompts, these debates are mainly concerned with the relationship between scientific discoveries and the overall management of the world. While some argue that such a process has allowed us to grasp intuitive thoughts about the environment, some contend that it has only resulted in a chaotic disorder. This essay is going to demonstrate specific details and evidence in regard to evaluating the scientific commitment to its world.
Admittedly, new discoveries of scientific inquiry have resulted in more complex ideas and questions. Once ignorance is supplanted to a discernible finding in certain fields, it is likely that we might face changes in our original concepts, including quintessential premises of the existence of human beings and the world. For instance, we have now begun to acknowledge that we are not fundamentally different from the so-called artificial intelligence, considering the mechanisms of the circuits of the brain. That is, several neuroscientists and A.I technologists have found that our intelligence is analogous to that of the so-called algorithms of google, which consists of cybernetical features of motion in informatics. Information is accumulated and developed with the help of its constant cycle of feedback. At the very beginning of the flourishing phase in such inquiry, several controversies have aroused due to the confusion of defining human beings and distinguishing humanity from its artificial products. The finding has challenged the essence of the belief of our very existence and the relation between human and nature. This may only be a glimpse of the numerous examples in which controversial ideas resulted from a single scientific research. Thus we may conclude that scientific discoveries might bring us to an ever more challenging world due to the confusion of fundamental understandings of the world.
Nevertheless, this confusion may, in the end, generate a considerable amount of insights that narrows the gap between our existence and the logical thoughts we accumulated so far. That is, even though contradictory and controversial discussions may lead us to serious headaches and nightmares in the short-term, we may evolve, if stretching the time in a longer perspective, into a more sapient echelon throughout a series of contemplation. For instance, once when Copernicus had discovered the revolving of earth around the sun, we are well informed that his findings have led to severe conflicts, as the priests and the politicians failed to situate themselves as the center of the world. The whole premise had to be collapsed in order to state the new finding as a scientific truth. However, we are also well informed with the eventual progresses that Copernicus’ findings led to. Without his findings and the resulting controversies, we may have never stood in the current condition in which Einstein’s relativity theory and Newton’s principles are regarded as scientific facts. Thus, it is fully acceptable to consider the constant change of our perspectives due to scientific inquiries as a helpful guideline for our ultimate progress.
In conclusion, we may now require a balancing perspective in assessing informative and technological changes throughout recent developments. That is, while it may be challenging to face the formidable and abrupt changes in our established viewpoints, the discoveries may lead us to a phase in which our curiosity will be fulfilled with wondering ideas and insights.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 551, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... That is, several neuroscientists and A.I technologists have found that our intel...
^
Line 2, column 1232, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'single scientific research'.
Suggestion: single scientific research
...which controversial ideas resulted from a single scientific research. Thus we may conclude that scientific d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1262, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...lted from a single scientific research. Thus we may conclude that scientific discove...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1244, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ul guideline for our ultimate progress. In conclusion, we may now require a bala...
^^^^
Line 4, column 180, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'facing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: facing
...s. That is, while it may be challenging to face the formidable and abrupt changes in ou...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 58.6224719101 145% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3136.0 2235.4752809 140% => OK
No of words: 573.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47294938918 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32694489377 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485165794066 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 974.7 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.523560497 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.545454545 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0454545455 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04545454545 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224666412497 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679650301322 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705936663827 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145598925426 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608289375643 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.1392134831 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 100.480337079 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.