Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
There is no doubt that education plays a vital role in modern society, after all, no matter how genius, banal or talented, people cannot gain any exceptional achievement without being educated. As Confucius once said:” A jade stone cannot be a masterpiece without incision”. And as the one who executes education process, we should attach as much importance as we can to teacher and serve a great welfare to them and keep a decent salary to them. But there is an argument that teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance which I was totally disagree with. I have substantial reasons to bolster my position. A few of them include:
A main flaw that this argument displays is that a person`s achievement cannot only be judged by academic performance. People are now living in a diverse era, and academic performance only accounts a few parts of human achievement. Take, for example, those famous athletes who win many awards, champions in different competitions. They are symbols of grand human spirits: try you best to be faster, higher and stronger. As a matter of fact, we have to admit that most of those glorious athletes do not perform very well in academic field, and can we blame this for their teachers and low down those poor teachers` salary? Obviously not!
Additionally, every student has their own preferred education approach, which is hard for teacher to satisfy everyone `s requirement. As Aesop once said: ” You please everyone, you please none”. The duty of every teacher is doing their best to teach knowledge. But like anyone else, every teacher has their own way about dressing, eating and most important, teaching. It is impossible to set a rigid regulation for every teacher and force them to follow those rules. It is irrefutable that Confucius was a unrivalled teacher who taught 3,000 students in total, and as a matter of fact, there are only 72 students who accomplished significant achievement in history. Based on this, could we classify Confucius as a bad teacher and low down his salary? We all know it`s absurd. Therefore, the argument presented here is ridiculous, too.
All in all, a student or a person`s achievement could not only be measured by his academic performance, and hence, a teacher`s ability cannot just be gauged by his/her students' academic performance. There are so many ways to promote teacher`s motivation about teaching and improving their teach capability. Among those, linking teacher`s salary to their students' academic performance is the worst one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, therefore, well, after all, as to, for example, no doubt, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00620673134 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540476190476 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.6553262237 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2727272727 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311872410644 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926719250706 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955070180186 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213914307474 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578532871394 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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