There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts — especially at a great cost in money and jobs — to save endangered animal or plant species.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
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Endangered animal and plant species often play vital roles in maintaining the equilibrium of our ecosystem. It does not require grand expenditures to preserve these important members of the environment and by maintaining or increasing the populations of certain animal species, society actually saves jobs that are reliant on the existence of those species.
By saving endangered plant and animal species that bolster the economy, society is actually keeping many jobs from being eliminated. Take for example bees, which have of late become an endangered species. If bees were to go extinct, in addition to the death of many flowers which contribute to the beauty of nature, society would be left without honey. Without honey several jobs would be come obsolete. Firstly beekeepers would no longer have bees to keep and that job would cease to exist. Then companies responsible for processing and packaging that honey to be put sold would be no more; that is an entire factory closed down. Furthermore, these effects are not just one fold considering that there are several companies that participate in the manufacturing and sale of honey. Therefore by protecting this endangered species, society is saving many jobs and aiding the economy by providing a product to be sold.
Moreover, the wording "at great cost in money and jobs" is misleading. In addition to the positive economic impact of saving jobs, attempts to protect endangered wildlife do not automatically involve an upfront expenditure. Rather, this cause would be better enacted by the passing of legislation prohibiting the hunting of endangered species or destroying of lands growing endangered plants. A recent example of such legislation is the Big Cat Act in the early 2000s. This piece of legislation attempted to outlaw the taking of endangered species from the wild to be kept as pets. While this may cause some inconvenience to hunters or farmers, it does not require an great upfront expenditure.
Lastly, several endangered species are indispensable members of our ecosystem. Without certain predator-prey relationships, certain species could become rampant and result in negative consequences to our every day lives. For instance, in Louisiana there is a large population of alligators, but there are no natural predators to restrict the propagation of the species. Without a present predator the alligator population continues to grow and many people now find them in their pools and backyards regularly. Should a predator go extinct, but not its prey, the subordinate population can grow exponentially and wreak havoc.
While at times society and governments may have more pressing issues to focus on than endangered species, there is still justification for being wary of population declines in endangered species as they are important contributors to the economy and the ecosystem and can be saved with legislative action rather than grandiose spending.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 783, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...in the manufacturing and sale of honey. Therefore by protecting this endangered species, ...
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Line 5, column 676, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...hunters or farmers, it does not require an great upfront expenditure. Lastly...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t require an great upfront expenditure. Lastly, several endangered species are i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2496.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3909287257 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97201328405 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518358531317 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.545539858 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.454545455 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0454545455 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203169749908 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604411664581 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516409566836 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111346965294 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388944998992 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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