“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The antropologists who gave such recommendation base their argument on the idea that if students talk about much more time talking about their biological parents it is because of the fact that their biological parents grow them and they generally care them. However, there are some important issues which should be handled to conclude such a recommendation.
First of all, it is not clear if the results that reached by Dr.Karp derives from the all interviews that he conducted in the group of islands or they are specifically belong to Tertia. In the first method, Tertia is the only island that is visited and in which observations are made. However, in the second one the sample is too large that it may mislead the results. So, the antroplogist should take into consideration to this issue while they giving a recommendation about it.
Secondly, spending much more time talking about their biological parents does not imply that they are reared by their biological parents. The students may have better feelings towards their biological parents because it is a little bit biological issue eventually/at the end. They may like them more and this may be the reason of why they are talking about them more but we cannot conclude that they are not grown by entire village.
Finally ,although they spend much more time talking about their biological parents this maybe because of the fact that they are reared by the rest of the village but they miss their biological parents and since people like talking about the things that they yearn for this is the reason why they are talking about them much. Moreover the content of the interviews also an important issue. What they are talking about their biological parents should also taken into the consideration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...ng about their biological parents it is because of the fact that their biological parents grow them and ...
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Line 2, column 64, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
...clear if the results that reached by Dr.Karp derives from the all interviews that he...
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Line 2, column 168, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...oup of islands or they are specifically belong to Tertia. In the first method, Tertia ...
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Line 4, column 226, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...heir biological parents because it is a little bit biological issue eventually/at the end....
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Line 6, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...not grown by entire village. Finally ,although they spend much more time talki...
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Line 6, column 95, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...out their biological parents this maybe because of the fact that they are reared by the rest of the vill...
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Line 6, column 326, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...n why they are talking about them much. Moreover the content of the interviews also an i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 296.0 442.535393258 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96959459459 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60554900005 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466216216216 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 451.8 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.6841513941 60.3974514979 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.583333333 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.21951772744 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0664795368947 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0392139659095 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582123082236 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0519127427627 0.150359130593 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536198001346 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 100.480337079 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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