Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Some people believe that students must be obliged to choose classes from various fields even those not directly connected to their specialization while pursuing their higher level of education. While it is hard to disagree that being a person with a broad rather than narrowed knowledge provides one with a lot of advantages, I could not accept the point of view that taking courses outside one’s main field of study should be mandatory. It would be more reasonable to give students an opportunity to choose such courses if they would like so and feel they have enough time for that.
First of all, becoming a specialist in any field requires a lot of efforts and time. At the same time, the period during which we study is limited to learn everything. Taking courses from programs that do not relate to the major field of study means sacrificing the time that could otherwise be spent on going more deeply into one’s specialization. In the end, a student may graduate with broad knowledge but not enough educated to be considered a specialist in his or her field. Consider a situation when you come to a doctor. Of course, all of us would like a doctor to be friendly and polite. But are these qualities more important than knowledge that this doctor possess? Who would you choose, an easy-going doctor who may provide you with a wrong diagnosis or a rude one who will treat you properly from your disease?
Secondly, at a time when students pursue higher degree they are mature enough to take their own decisions about whether they want or not to take courses that are not directly related to their major. If one considers that having broad knowledge is important as it may help to develop better career or get valuable connections, then he or she may decide to attend these courses. This will allow students to think strategically, make their own decisions and learn by their own mistakes. It would be a better option to inform students about the advantages that courses outside the major might bring. But the final choice should be after the students. In the end, a student may be interested in courses that are not offered by the university and would rather spend his or her time on activities outside the university.
Thus, I believe that universities should follow more flexible policy when students are allowed to choose themselves whether to attend classes outside their field of study or better devote this time to go more deeply in their major or to pursue activities outside the university. This will not only enable them to become better specialists but will also give them an opportunity to develop strategic thinking and learn how to make their own decisions. This will also bring advantages to the university that will be able to gain better reputation among its students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
... the time that could otherwise be spent on going more deeply into one's specializat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.841995842 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59102885478 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465696465696 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.076243443 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.45 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.05 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216819026098 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636587333595 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419837428923 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13533723528 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286795932792 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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