The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written record.
With the advance of the technology, the ability of video cameras is improving and winning the popularity: from the low resolution when the video camera just come into light, nowadays it can record the things around us with great clarity. From this, the speaker claims that the video camera has become a more important mean for documenting and recording. In my view, I agree with that the video camera is a necessary equipment in modern life, however, there are still some areas that it cannot eclipse the traditional writing record.
I concede that the video camera has some unparalleled attributes compared to written record. First, it vividly record every moment of an event without ignoring or abridging any detail. The video recording can recover the scene of the specific period, such as the behaviors of people in the scene and the other detail like the shape, darkness, color of the ambience. By contrast, the paper record inescapably would loose some details since its contents are from one’s fracture memory. Second, its trustability is undeniable. Video records are consisted by continuous frames so it can faithfully register every moment of the period. On the contrary, paper records may be falsified by the writer, no matter it is deliberate or unintentional.
However, despite the advantages I mentioned above, there are other aspects makes paper record unique. The most obvious thing is that emotional feeling can be represented on the paper record. Considering the different between a movie and a novel. By reading a novel, the reader can delve deeply into the inner mind of the protagonist; from the power of the words, we can feel the anger, happiness, mournful, and the subtle transition between them. Although one may say that we can feel the mood of the actors in the video record, the small differences happen inside their mind are unable to be fetched only by looking it.
Another limit of video records is that it needs extra facilities to access, whereas that stuff is not necessary to read paper records. To illustrate, if a hiker is stock in a mountain without any electricity supply; in this circumstance those video records to guide him to find the route in the mountain are futile, instead, the paper records like the description of the route or a drawing map can be his salvation. Or consider that a teacher want to educate children in peripheral areas, where lack of infrastructure and technological devices, then the paper records are the teachers only choice.
To sum up, although it is undeniable that video records are becoming popular and more widespread, it didn’t indicate it will ultimately become more important than written records. In my view, two kinds of recording ways have their own benefit and they can complement with each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 198, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding things'?
Suggestion: the surrounding things
...come into light, nowadays it can record the things around us with great clarity. From this, the spea...
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Line 1, column 405, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'necessary equipment'.
Suggestion: necessary equipment
..., I agree with that the video camera is a necessary equipment in modern life, however, there are stil...
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Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'records'?
Suggestion: records
...ed to written record. First, it vividly record every moment of an event without ignori...
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Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ast, the paper record inescapably would loose some details since its contents are fro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, whereas, such as, in my view, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2331.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02370689655 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68414330096 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543103448276 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6921058432 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.55 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340884997475 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103968027919 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779793200996 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195338526543 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736084771732 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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