The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that
it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
This topic upraises the controversial issue of whether video camera or written article is more important form for documentation of contemporary life.Indisputably, video camera has some technological and communication advantages for picturing the contemporary life.Nevertheless, it's not a better approach to site anything better than written article,which has good constancy,visualization and availability.Thus, i generally disagree with the opinion that video camera can be a better approach for documentation of our regular event and concur that written documentation is a better approach in this regard.
First of all, in the written document you can express the idea with your opinion and the reader can visualize the things with his own conscience.I would like to point out that written article can be a good source of own mental visualization. To illustrate, let us look at the example of a biography.In a biography, an author can make a picture of the whole life of an acumen with his literature consummate. In this circumstance, inevitably the reader can get a mental picture of the hole life. consequently, it is pretty ineluctable that in videography can not express such biography unequivocally.
Furthermore, if celluloid flim can not be a better documentation approach then consider another illustration.Specifically, those who live in certain suburb or pastoral area, it won't be possible for them to manage video camera accessories while needed.On the other hand, simple pen and paper can easily be accessable. Now, Both our shrewdness and savoir faire have told us that a video documentation can also editted or changes without any notice of the plebeian.on the other hand, while you try to change a written essay it will not be so plausible like the previous one.Hence, all the manifestation above demonstrate that written idea has better approximation than the graphical one.
Admittedly, video document has also some better aspect. This is plausible especially when we consider about the exact information which any enforcement agency like detective brunch needed.In addition,accuracy can also provide by graphical presentation.However, only this evidence doesn't constitute a ample support to claim that video documentation is a better approach.
In termination, although video documentation has some augment approach, it is not necessarily concede that it is better approach.As long as some measurement are performed,written assertion will be better for documentation of any contemporary life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, then, thus, while, in addition, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65091863517 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.80862595668 2.79657885939 136% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53280839895 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 23.0359550562 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 155.704078302 60.3974514979 258% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 215.3 118.986275619 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.1 23.4991977007 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.7 5.21951772744 282% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 7.80617977528 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225011939226 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0890231704414 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652221114238 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131868670856 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695793644902 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.2 14.1392134831 171% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 15.99 48.8420337079 33% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 12.1743820225 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 12.1639044944 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 33.0 11.8971910112 277% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.2143820225 153% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.7820224719 178% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.