Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Nowadays, everyone wants to be successful in a short period of time. The prompt states that youth should be instructed that they must look for the success which takes a harder way rather than the short way. In my opinion, I agree with the prompt and argue that being success in a short cut way doesn’t last forever.
To begin, the primary goal of every individual is to become successful and have financial freedom. There are many fraud people who make complete use of it. Many people fall into the trick. For instance, in India, there are many multiple chain companies that ask for the money to deposit and tell that the return will be 10 times greater than what is deposited. But there are situations where this goes haywire. The example states that risk is involved in this purpose.
Further, having a success by working hard gives more satisfaction to an individual rather than being successful in a short way. Once after being successful, when a person looks back to see the struggle there will be nothing to cherish about. For instance, consider Bill Gates, he worked hard for years and now he is one of the most admired person. People try to emulate him whereas a person who became instantly rich by robbery is not considered as an ideal person.
However, every individual must think before working on their dream whether it is achievable or not. A person cannot dream that he can fly if he practices jumping by seeing movies or videos. The goal should be realistic and achievable so that he can be encouraged. Schools and college must be responsible enough in the student’s life such that they should be a moral support. Having a support bolsters the confidence of the student.
Thus, in my conclusion, individual must be supported to work towards a long term goal provided that they are realistic rather than working on a goal which gives instant results such as robbery etc.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ryone wants to be successful in a short period of time. The prompt states that youth should be...
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Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: SHORT_CUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shortcut'?
Suggestion: shortcut
...rompt and argue that being success in a short cut way doesn't last forever. To ...
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Line 9, column 113, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a short way" with adverb for "short"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...individual rather than being successful in a short way. Once after being successful, when a pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, so, thus, whereas, for instance, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81212121212 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52322362939 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554545454545 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.172766192 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5789473684 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3684210526 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15789473684 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189049103758 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536305995257 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053901453038 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111817139807 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413428386051 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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