The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how much time the UK residents spend on the telephone in three different call types during 1995 to 2002. Overall, throughout the surveyed period, the most phone calls were local calls used by fixed line and the gap between the three categories was narrowed with time.
First of all, local fixed line calls started it figure at 72 billion minutes in 1995, about twice as much as that of national and international calls made through fixed line. After that, this number experienced a steady increase, peaking at 90 billion minutes in 1999 before smoothly dropping back to its original statistic at 72 billion minutes in 2002.
As for national and international fixed line calls, although it kept being the half amount of that in local fixed line calls until 1999, the time English people spent on it gradually grew to 60 billion minutes in 2002. This trend also can be viewed in the category of mobile calls but in a more significant way as it firstly began at 4 billion minutes in 1995, and dramatically soared to 40 billion minutes in 2002, which were ten times more than its initial number.
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flaws:
1. Those number may not be correct:
as it firstly began at 4 billion minutes in 1995, and dramatically soared to 40 billion minutes in 2002, which were ten times more than its initial number.
2. better summary:
although local fixed line calls were still the most popular in 2002. The gap between the three categories had narrowed considerably over the second half of the period in question.
3. more summary:
While there was a decrease in the number of local category, the other two witnessed a period of growth.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 10
No. of Words: 195 200
No. of Characters: 905 1000
No. of Different Words: 114 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.737 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.641 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.4 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 55 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 43 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.741 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.535 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.168 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 49, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'figures'?
Suggestion: figures
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, as for, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 927.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75384615385 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41687035801 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610256410256 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.9561150102 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.5 112.824112599 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 22.9334400587 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.23603664747 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210135608244 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116998308379 0.103423049105 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447489503597 0.0843802449381 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152442105945 0.15604864568 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0101831223459 0.0819641961636 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.2329268293 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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