You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer a

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,
• describe the situation
• explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
• say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you to express my dissatisfaction with my current accommodation.

I am a freshman living in a room in the college which I share with a sophomore. Although the intention of assigning a room to me and a sophomore is probably that I can perform better at the college by his help, the opposite is actually happening.

Firstly, not only does he stay up till late at night, but he makes a lot of noise, making it impossible to get a good sleep at the room. The teachers have already complained for several times why I look so sleepy and distracted in the class. Secondly, he smokes every now and then in the room, being the worst thing for me because of my asthma.

I would be happy if you could arrange for me to live in a room alone, or even assign me with a roommate who at least tries to understand that there is another human being who lives in the same room.

I look forward to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Aidin Farughi

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...acted in the class. Secondly, he smokes every now and then in the room, being the worst thing for ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 16, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...ves in the same room. I look forward to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully, Ai...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 805.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.375 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60211466098 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.641304347826 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.6027083221 44.8134815571 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4444444444 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 4.34317383033 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198319841535 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806778971342 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788236978181 0.0603063233224 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122929955567 0.12726935374 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541178295876 0.0580467560999 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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