Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
In today’s modern world, career and education have been a matter of great concern. While some people believe that graduated from the university is the ideal way to pursue their dream jobs, others contend that individuals should gain the experience and learn the practical skills in the real life. I agree with the idea that both sides have the same important to people.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why some critics support the view that students should continue their education at a higher level. This is because, in today, career market become more and more competitive, which require applicants own academic qualification. Besides of it, students who want to become a doctor, a lawyer or a teacher just have only way is a study in an academic institution and get a suitable degree. In addition to that, employees who graduated from the top university often get a prominent job in a good company and get higher salary than those who own fewer qualification. For example, a report of the Vietnamese government in 2017 showed that 70% graduates from university find a right job which related to their major and gets the salary higher twice compare with those who did not complete their education at the university.
On the other hand, getting experience and soft skills in real life are advantageous in some extents. First of all, It is thought that these ways are the proper method for who do not have an opportunity to study at a higher level. For example, someones who want to become a mechanic fixer or a plumber find it suitable to join a vocational training rather than continue to keep up with an academic subject. Perhaps a host of those could progress quickly and become a successful people if they have enough confidence and knowledge which gain from the experience. By the way, soft skills are necessary to factor to make a comprehension development person and it has to self-study in outside, which hardly was taught in the education system. Therefore, I also believe that without qualification from university and getting experience from the community have their own advantages.
In conclusion, continue higher study or self-study in real life still dilemma situation. However, I personally concur that both of them still have their own merits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...to study at a higher level. For example, someones who want to become a mechanic f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, by the way, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97650130548 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74866157743 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516971279373 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2779108729 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.125 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244966748706 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811286455265 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774257654062 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137541998364 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701925866041 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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