In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes. Why is this happening? How should they be punished?
Nowadays there has been a tendency towards the growth level of crime in the young groups in several countries. In my perspective, I reckon that it stems from the situation of leaving school at the early stage, and community service should be implemented to them.
Admittedly, the surge of this trend affects many aspects of life and it is on account of several reasons. Firstly, the young people who are school-leavers are facing obstacles in life, so they have to commit crimes. In fact, many firms highly require a lot of qualifications and skills that those who quit schools do not have acquisition and joining labor force as a blue-collar with very low income annually could not afford to maintain their survival. For instance, in Vietnam, the youngsters who graduate from university with outstanding academic results may have more advantages than others in ensuring an occupation with appealing wages. Thus, they would embrace becoming an offender as drug dealers and robbers since a high income can improve their living standards.
Although this trend would cause detrimental effects to society, the particular penalties should be carefully considered. Firstly, the government should discipline the young criminal community service. In fact, these people only confront difficulties in stabilizing their lives, so if judges abuse heavy penalties such as prison sentences, it would lead to a sense of hostility and disappointment and may return to an old path afterward. Therefore, community service is a prominent option for defendants convicted of crimes since their effort and dedication would contribute to enhancing the image of the community and improving suitable skills for future works. To be more specific, in Western countries, this kind of punishment for those who are under 18 years old is inevitable since it causes less physical and mental damage.
In conclusion, there is much evidence of criminal activities occurring in the children, especially the school-leavers, since they cannot confront others due to the lack of qualifications and skills. Thus, instead of jail sentences that can trigger negative effects, the government should have careful consideration when applying punishment to them.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 132, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...eral reasons. Firstly, the young people who are school-leavers are facing obstacles in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38505747126 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94410540554 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600574712644 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8237710663 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.857142857 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167295496027 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548086787667 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333090590401 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917228424181 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013542905062 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 132, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...eral reasons. Firstly, the young people who are school-leavers are facing obstacles in ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38505747126 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94410540554 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600574712644 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8237710663 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.857142857 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167295496027 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548086787667 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333090590401 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917228424181 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013542905062 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.