At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years many populations consist mostly of young adults, compared to lower percentage of older citizens. This phenomenon has some advantages, mainly that this age group is relatively in better health condition. However, there are also some drawbacks like the lack of knowledge and experience. This essay will discuss both views, and will argue that the advantages surpass the disadvantages.

Younger adults are generally healthier than the elderly and are less prone to morbid diseases, and since the government spends huge amounts of money on healthcare, including drugs, health centers and senile housings, having a higher population of young adults can reduce these expenses significantly. To illustrate, in Jordan the amount of money spent on healthcare for senior citizens has reached 3% of the national income in the last 10 years. Furthermore, younger people have the physical strength needed to perform hard jobs, especially those require physical ability, like building farming and industry. Therefore having higher number of young adults means abundant workforce, and therefore developing the country as a whole, including building infrastructure, food production…,etc.

On the other hand, people need a very long time to get the knowledge and experience needed to perform some vital jobs, like politics, economy and academic careers to mention a few. For this reason a young population may lack people with high level of experience who are able to take the proper decisions to lead the country to better future. However if we think about the matter thoroughly we conclude that we need much more laborers than we need leaders, it takes a lot of workers, builders, farmers…etc, but only a few organizers and experts.

In conclusion, older citizens have a very important role in guiding and teaching the
younger generations, but the ideal society should have relatively higher number of
young people, because they are the power behind building and development.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43225806452 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88884610906 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612903225806 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.1228271597 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.333333333 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8333333333 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218134708109 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720031350655 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566109074852 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981149013198 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516139560039 0.056905535591 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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