In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Nowadays, it seems like people in developed countries are gaining weight more than the average rate and the level of their health and fitness are at risk. I believe modern life has a giant impact on this issue and my reasons are as follows.
Firstly, unfortunately it is clear that living in an industrial era made us become robots. Since Modern life brought many jobs to the desks and offices, it entails much more working hours without any significant movements. People gradually became more occupied and busy with making money in order to live a convenient life and this caused them to devote less time to any other activities such as working out and even eating healthy. Secondly, when a body has no movement and there is no endorphin and adrenaline releasing, Mental health will be at risk and the person is going to feel depressed more so ever. Depression also can lead to consuming fast food and junk food to excess and therefore, people will gain weight more and more.
I believe that it is vitally important for the governments to provide gyms at big offices or even distribute sport tickets and bonuses for employees all over the country. Also I contend that social media plays an important role in everyone’s lives these days, and advertisement has a big impact on individuals. Therefore, I think governments should come up with ideas to encourage people to eat healthy food and join in more activities.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that I believe modern life despite all the salient effects have had on our everyday lives, is also leading us to depression and while that can cause some serious and dangerous difficulties for both body and mental health, I think it demands out further consideration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1455.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86622073579 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69208956511 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61872909699 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.7596754254 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.272727273 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1818181818 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129663458634 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463883659449 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614866244403 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850934242439 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512739451752 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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