some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them
Every parent will do anything to support the development of their children. They will supply the best products such as food, education, clothes and also entertainment to increase their children skills. However, many parents do not realize that sometimes they could make a wrong decision and the effect on their children is dangerous. Some people think that allowing children to make their own decision on food, clothes or the entertainment will give a bad effect on the children. For example, becomes individuals in society and only thinks about their want. On the other hand, some people believe that is very important to let the children decide about their wishes based on their point of view. I strongly believe that learning the children about decides their own decision is a critical aspect to develop their skill. However, the decision should be influenced by an adult or parents.
In other hand, people believe that children who have everything they want could be harmful. Because it directly will develop a person who does not respect other people. This kid usually becomes a spoiled child and also they grow up with lack of the leadership skills. The children will choose the decisions only based on their own advantages. This type of children also more difficult to make a new friend. Individualism is great if it maintains to stay on the track. These could be useful in a difficult area. However, these children also less sympathy for other who requires a special needs. They want everything is under control even if the process does not appropriate. And also, they will grow up with a few of friend or collages.
In other hand, people believe that the children should give an authority to choose decisions that effect for them. I strongly believed that children who have their own voice become more independent and responsible for their lives. The children will choose the decisions not only from their point of view but also decide which effect effectively for other people. They will have a strong networking skill and also becomes an influencer for other people. In my experience, when I was in college where located far from home, I required choosing my own way gaining some money to support my education. So, I was able to choose the best for me to do a job. While, at the same time also needed finishing my own education on time. I could do it both because my parent gave their trust since I was a kid to choose my own decisions.
To sum up, I believe that children should be able to choose their decisions. However, the influence of the parent still required. Individualism only gives benefit if it maintains in the right way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 653, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to choose the best for me to do a job. While, at the same time also needed finishing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, while, for example, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 455.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83956043956 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54211335252 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435164835165 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5911498162 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.9310344828 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6896551724 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1724137931 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36925649639 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107268256256 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104985495621 0.0667982634062 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237017514269 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123098643018 0.056905535591 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.0946893788 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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