Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. How far do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. How far do you agree or disagree?

Undoubtedly, there are a widely perceptions on the issue of competitive sport is far beneficial regardless of types of it, however some people think this matter is ignored by authorities at school and other related organization to insert it in curriculum. Likewise i agree with them up to a point and I attempt to present my reasons in this essay as follows.
First of all, I suppose it big a big mistake to base our views on broad generalizations that all educational centers experience the same conditions and it would be different in various regions of the world. Though, athletic activities are not taken into account in many countries but just a few governments in the worldwide have invested in this trend, as a result, numerous talents are nurtured who provide remarkable prosperity in global tournaments. To illustrate, China is a particularly good example of this story and teenagers play s significant role in team ranking. Thus, I would argue that at the heart of matter, the policies taken by potent characters determines the importance of mentioned-above trend.

Secondly and even more importantly, majority of developing lands have no efficient budget to allocate these kinds of measures, therefore, they are highly likely to pay their financial incents in educational contents namely over-horse classes rather than entertainment program. Admittedly, creating facilities including gyms and courts perhaps demand no considerable amount of money, thereby, a number of experts consider it as an excuse.

To sum it up, this issue of whether we should extend the competitive operations at learning amenities or not is certainly a contentious one which demand out more consideration from relevant persons in ministries.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, i suppose, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31636363636 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18207791148 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.701818181818 0.561755894193 125% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.0912665102 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.444444444 106.682146367 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5555555556 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2222222222 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113611083087 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379934296646 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445620337135 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0615587319228 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502669204925 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 50.2224549098 65% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.52 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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