Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people view the world as the battlefield where the winner person who only could conquer the world. While Others might think that teaching children to be “corporation” will be more being valuable in the future. However, in this essay, I'll explain if the competition ideas only creating the winner and leaving the looser or whether in another hands, Corporation idea is the more appropriate method to transform the children into the precious man in the future.

Competition is undoubtedly good. this thing guides and designs a child and an adult to reach the limit of their potential talents and even develops them to become exceeds. In another word, Competition could encourage every person to produce the new inventions either in technology, education or even social and political. Furthermore, for a children competition doesn't merely about winning, but more importantly, How they can learn from the mistake and soon converting their mistakes into the success.

However, Focusing only on competitiveness is not always beneficial for children. To begin with, young children are naturally egocentric. If this demeanor is overlooked by the parents, It would soon designate the children lack of corporation as a team. As a result, Children have to know that there are others around them. Therefore, They have to be taught by the skill of corporation and sharing among others. A further point is that by learning to corporate and work in teams, children learn responsibility when things go bad as well as good. Moreover, in The highly interdependent knowledge society, people are inclined to bond each other and being integrated as a team to accomplish some enormous project instead of finishing the project apart. Such as, in the construction of high rise building, not only architect and civil engineer who involve in the project but also mechanical, an electrical and structural engineer might be included.
In conclusion, it is almost impossible to separate these two standards of our lives. In one side, people are individualist but in another side, people are also social. Therefore, generating both competition and corporation abilities to children are the tremendous threshold to prepare them in their future life.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, even so, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30617977528 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0490599382 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9044343708 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.944444444 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243889149802 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715981301993 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378152384518 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139483723295 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432762775054 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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