Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, people have been having a keen interest in children education, since children are the future of our world. Several people believed that the contest between children should be fostered, while others support an idea which is that children who are learnt how to work together with peers become more advantageous adults. In my opinion, I agree partly with both viewpoints.
On the one hand, it is understandable why people foster contest in children. The key rationale in favor of this view is that the contest help to arouse faculties inside each child. If 2 children have the same goal and the prize is just given for the first person can touch the goal, they will try harder than normal to reach the achievement. For instance, it is clear to see in a tennis match, the first prize is just given for the winner who can defeat the competitor. Conversely, if children do not have to contest with other peers, so they do not need to make strides and they will never improve themselves in order to become a better person.
On the other hand, working together also plays a vital role in children education. We can conceive of a situation that in a team, members always contest with others, everyone wants to become the most valuable player in this team without the attention about the purpose of the team, this team will be broken early. A football team perfectly exemplifies this point. In a match, it is undeniable that a player cannot run from the start point of a football court to the endpoint in order to have a goal, instead of doing it alone, they have to pass the ball and connect well to the teammate to score.
In conclusion, children need to study both contests and working together with others to improve themselves comprehensively.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, if, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57791650364 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541095890411 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4398782264 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.692307692 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217325541666 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794130893017 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604951675171 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142091338232 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773539244823 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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