The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Obesity is one of the diseases that is widespread in our world today. No doubt that obesity causes health issues in our bodies. Obesity could lead to diabetes, hypertension, heart diseases and surely if can affect your bone and make load on it leading to arthritis and other bone diseases. As a result the health care system have to deal with all this consequences.
Overweight people are in real need of regular checkups to detect any diseases caused by obesity as early as possible. This will help to control any accompanying diseases. Healthy diet to be followed will be a must to reduce their weight. Dietician can plan the meals that will help effectively reduce their weight through balanced diet. Consequently obese people will be a load on any health care system.
Having more physical education lessons in schools is not a solution at all. However practicing any kind of sport is essential to help restrain the hazardous effect of obesity. In my opinion, raising the awareness of the students by giving sessions discussing the health issues caused by obesity is more important and effective. Also changing the lifestyle by eating healthy food containing vegetables, fruits and avoiding junk food is the main key for reducing weight.
Agreeing with giving more physical education lessons means obesity is only related to decreased physical activity which is completely not true.
Many factors could lead to obesity. Genetical disorders , food type , hormonal changes and even hereditary factors contribute to obesity. Considering all these factors is the main solution for obesity . Every case should be treated individually according to the reasons that caused obesity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, kind of, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24444444444 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69444235227 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588888888889 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9234869352 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6666666667 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184341882746 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597776536385 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856177597057 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998424306455 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559320208203 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.52 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.