At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that, the population of younger people in some countries is noticeably more than elderly people. While the ageing population is of course essential, I personally believe that younger population should be considered as a vital lifeline for a community.
On the one hand, having more young adults in a community in comparison with the elderly can cause harmful impacts. In terms of unemployment issues, as the number of young people increases, finding an adequate job could be a severe challenging for everyone. In fact, oversupply of labor would lead to an unfair competition among applicants, possibly increase the amount of unemployment in a society. When it comes to basic necessities such as public services and a place to live, an enormous strain on the infrastructure of the cities will be laid by the over-young population. Eventually, there is no doubt that many youths might be at risk of committing crimes due to failing to find adequate work and therefore cannot afford.
On the other hand, I would argue that the benefits of having a great deal of youths cannot be neglected. Firstly, a creative environment in which young people would be encouraged to participate, can highly boost new ideas and innovations. Hence, vibrant workforce would be able to adopt new technologies and even accelerate productivity in an industrial country. Secondly, as long as we employ our younger generation, there will be an enhancement in economic growth in all aspects. As a result, the more force of workers available involve, the more efficiency gains. For example, money from taxes will not improve unless we have more workforce and younger population in the society which helps to accommodate public needs.
In conclusion, it seems to me that it would be better to have young adults rather than having more ageing population.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 417, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...ployment in a society. When it comes to basic necessities such as public services and a place to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, of course, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11258278146 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95365723276 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576158940397 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.9041453155 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 110.285714286 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5714285714 7.06120827912 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0863361082325 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0316309608375 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368270056296 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0585512730442 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394904510408 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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