Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays in this modern era the definition of entertainment has evolved. People who are in this profession mint huge amount of money. There are many people who believe that for the shake of entertainment only entertainers should not be paid that much. With proper consideration of this notion I would like to explicate my views in coming paragraph.
Firstly, to entertain someone is not an effortless task. Entertainers put their hard work and bring fun and leisure in our boring life. Additionally, getting good payment is not generalised with each and every individual who is in this occupation. There are number of people who want to make career as an entertainer however, only few are successful at that level. Also, it takes years long hard work and patience to achieve that success. For instance, sports persons train themselves for a long time and dedicate all their time to perform desired sport for us. As well as actors spend several years in transforming their body and learn action to entertain us. Nothing is an overnight job, an arduous lifestyle is entail to earn that much money. Furthermore, the career lifespan of performer is very short unlike doctors or engineers, which justifies their handsome earning.
Moreover, I believe that there are some other professions also which need to paid more attention. Entertainment is essential part of our life however, that can't overcome the significance of our own safety. The people who protects us and assures us to be at safe place should be paid well. Such as, Army should be entitled with all the facilities and luxury. Their pay scale should be equivalent to the other entertainers. In addition to this, every individual who risks their life in civilians safety should be paid more than any other profession. Good pay scale will divert attention of young toward these jobs and that will help country to provide a better and secure life to people.
To conclude my view I would say that pay scale should be determined on the basis of hard work we put in and risk factor of profession. On the basis of just entertainment no one should be paid that much.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8864265928 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72630503786 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548476454294 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.420959986 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.1818181818 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4090909091 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.67935871743 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212852296422 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645391440966 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600244131025 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135412594135 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349349140834 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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