Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Children are curious minds with energetic bodies. One must encourage them to maintain a balance between both right from the young age. This will help the children manage and achieve their goals in adulthood.
Parents often want their kids to socialize with other children so that they learn from each other. The children in a controlled environment tend to depend on each other which makes them liable for each other. It incriminates a sense of responsibility in them. Considering this factor, people have started encouraging play-dates for their children. These play-dates are arranged after school to avoid slacking in school. Parents arrange certain activities for the kids on these play-dates like for example, team games, a sports activity etcetera. This helps the children to learn about their surroundings and how they change with respect to certain factors along with understanding other children’s behavior.
On the other hand, some parents want their children to achieve a sense of control over their minds and body. In this case, the children are taught how to not be alone when they are alone. For instance, children are encouraged to spend their time reading books or watching documentaries. This helps them acquire knowledge about certain things in particular. Their minds become sharp and rational thinking is encouraged.
In my opinion, the approach should differ from children to children as not everyone is of the same IQ level or have the same physical strength. The parents should be able to decide which path to take as per their children’s behavior and not force them to do either of it because they think it is right for their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...y-dates like for example, team games, a sports activity etcetera. This helps the child...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, for example, for instance, in fact, in particular, in my opinion, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1397.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13602941176 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6442974772 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547794117647 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.597596684 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1764705882 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382546035408 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127672326103 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871053073308 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243273950933 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557003042252 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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