Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness.To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Essay topics:

Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Joy used always to be combined with the economic status of the person. While some people agree that if you are rich this will make sure your happiness. In my opinion, there are other factors that come first and that make you happier such as healthy body and mind.

In the first hand, we all agree that money is an important element for humans to survive. Actually, with money you will be able to get all your needs such as food, clothes and routine medical check-ups. In addition, it will help you to respond to all your family requisite like education, entertainment and comfortable house. For instance, a man who earns a reputable salary is able to live with his family in a good conditions and plans for several holidays.

On the other hand, being healthy and having a peaceful mind are also considered major factors. Firstly, if you don't have a healthy body you will not be able to work, consequently you will not earn money. Secondly, if you suffers from anxiety or other mental issues this will also affect your performance and sometimes it can lead to your firing . Moreover, we should also highlight an important point that money alone is not enough. Let us take an example of a wealthy person that is being treated for breast cancer, in fact his money alone will not be able to cure his condition.

To sum up, although money is a crucial factor to be happy and respond to all your financial needs, other main factors should also to be taken into consideration such as physical and mental health.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'used'.
Suggestion: always used
Joy used always to be combined with the economic status...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...sidered major factors. Firstly, if you dont have a healthy body you will not be abl...
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Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'suffer'
Suggestion: suffer
...u will not earn money. Secondly, if you suffers from anxiety or other mental issues thi...
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Suggestion:
...ther mental issues this will also affect your performance and sometimes it can le...
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Suggestion: .
...and sometimes it can lead to your firing . Moreover, we should also highlight an i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66914498141 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40094860083 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557620817844 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9113926067 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6153846154 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6153846154 7.06120827912 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106195586343 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464719557758 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488439339505 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0730087397209 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546808964148 0.056905535591 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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