As well as making money businesses should also have social responsibilities Do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

As well as making money, businesses should also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that money is necessary to run the business. Some people might think that as important as earning money, the majority of companies must take responsible the social issues as well. Although expanding capital of the corporation is important, I strongly agree with the idea. I shall explain why many companies should have social responsibilities in this essay.

First of all, corporations have to treat the level of employment very seriously for community. In order to increase the employment rate, companies can hire more people because they might not operate their industries without employees. For example, as far as unemployment is concerned, the number of companies should recruit them as possible as they can to improve the employment rate because it is now become a critical social problem particularly among young people. Thus, diminishing young people's unemployment issue is many companies' role as a social duty.

Moreover, there is one more problem that enterprise can solve in terms of students' mental disease for society. To put it another way, the number of university students study hard due to having a good occupation. Furthermore, it not only leads young students under pressure, but also they suffer mental disease such as depression or anxiety. Because they always worry about their future life if they would not have a good job. In spite of the fact that they concern about it, many employers are entitled to reduce this phenomenon. For instance, they can have generous criteria for interviewers when candidates might have a lack of conditions such as low level of education.

In conclusion, I think that the major aim for operating business is earning money. However, many corporations also need to take responsibilities to resolve the social issues as a part of society.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 528, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
...oung peoples unemployment issue is many companies role as a social duty. Moreover, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19047619048 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88675134595 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56462585034 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.929004403 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.375 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.375 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197891551348 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656127821581 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572941979912 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140664239506 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820712470876 0.056905535591 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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