• 18. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Communication is an inseparable part of human’s daily life. People are in relation to people every day, and there is no doubt that they can be influenced by other people. A question which can be raised in this regard is that who is the most effective on students behavior and their attitude. Some people believe that teachers are very influential for them, while others hold the opinion that they are more influenced by their friends. I subscribe to the latter opinion, and in the ensuing paragraphs, I will provide two reasons to illustrate my point of view.
To begin with, friends are the ones who keep the student’s company most of the time. Students spend a great deal of time with their friends, for example, they are with them in the classroom, or they go out with each other. It is clear that the more one allocates his or her time on someone or something, there is the more chance to get influence form them. But they only spend only a few hours with their teachers during the week. According to research, a person’s personality is the average the personality of five people they spend on with. My opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. I had a close friend when I was a high school student, who I met her every day and talked a lot with each other. She was a very kind girl and helped other students with their homework. Because I admired her so much, gradually I became like her and helped other students. Hence, it is clear that when students spend most of their time with someone, like their friends, they are influenced by them, and get their behavior and attitudes.
The second reason is that student trusts their friends so they take their advice or their opinions about different topics. Students choose their friends themselves, so they choose someone similar to them and have a lot in common, because of that they can trust their friends. As a result, when the student is struggling with making a decision, or they face with a bad situation, they listen to their friend’s advice since they trust their friends, they accept their advice. For instance, one of my friends told me about one of my behaviors, saying that it
In conclusion, considering both the reasons mentioned above, I believe that friends are the most influential persons in students’ lives. Because the students allocate most of their times with their friends, moreover, they trust in their friends, thus they accepted their advice about their behavior. Therefore, friends gradually can change students behavior and attitudes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86394557823 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64055622228 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458049886621 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2490188269 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.142857143 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321567549758 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117550997666 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991600122799 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232766902277 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479870752013 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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